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I need some help me to polish a proofread paper?

I have my paper here done and i did some of my editing, but it doesn’t run smoothly. So, i need some experts to help me to with the sentence structures in this paper. Thanks!
This is what my research paper looks like:
CRYSTAL METH
Youth Shelter Worker reports “kids on crystal just lose it, break things, do property damage. They hurt themselves” (as cited in Hendley, 2006, P.163). Crystal Meth is also called methamphetamine which comes with different terms, such as Biker’s coffee, Blue meth, Chalk, Hot Ice, Ice, Speed, Crank, and many other meth names. With these various names, meth has the shape that is “clear, chunky crystal” (CBC, 2005, paragraph 1) which contains two quick-to-bond methyl (CH3 or methane with a hydrogen atom removed) hole (Langton, 2007). When it heats, it will begin to dissolve into white, yellow, or even pink powder (Street level consulting, 2008). Crystal meth did not exist until the Second World War from 1939-1945. It used to distribute among many soldiers for fighting off drowsiness or exhaustion (Langton, 2007). By 1950, people such as athletes, dieters, and college students began to use crystal meth. For example, athletes used it for gaining strengths for a better performance, dieters used it for losing weight, and college students used it for all night study session (Schleifer, 1999). Gradually until today, some adolescents begin to use crystal meth in the rave parties. Other than adolescents, gay males, people in rural, and the people in the bath houses also use crystal meth. Sometimes, crystal meth can be seen in some locations such as clubs, empty houses, streets, and home. According to 2005 National Survey on Drug Use and Health, it reports “at least approximate 10.4 million of American teens who were aged twelve or older used meth at least once in their life for recreational use, representing 4.3% of the U.S. population in that age group” (Methamphetamine-addiction, 2008, paragraph 1). Most adolescents involves within the drug issue because it makes them feel hyperactive, ecstasy, judicious and beautiful (Schleifer, 1999). The addicts feel energetic and addictive after taking meth is because a stimulant which “increases the levels of two neurotransmitters, nor epinephrine, dopamine, and stamina” (Ramon, 2008, paragraph 4). Any meth users, who become addicted, are very likely to have violent behaviors, loss of appetite, depression, disorganized life style, hallucination, numbness, insomnia, increase of heart rate, fatal kidney, and lung disorders, as a result (Schleifer, 1999). Even though the meth has caused the users to have negative effect, some treatments would help the addicts to recover. One of the treatments that might be able to help the addicts is to attend meth rehab program. This program is not only does it help the addicts to detox, but there are some support groups can “provide with knowledge on how to change [the addicts’] lives and how to live comfortably without meth” (stop meth addiction, 2008, paragraph 1). Another treatment to support the meth users is to take pills which are given from a support group. The pills work like an antibiotic that remove any meth drugs inside the users’ body. This treatment is mainly looked for immediate physical symptoms (stop meth addiction, 2008). Crystal meth becomes an important issue which causes much harm to adolescents and adults mentally and physically. To prevent from anymore of these serious problems, adolescents should be taught to understand about what is crystal meth and its disadvantage use on human body.

Honestly, I read the paper and it has a lot more work to be done. If I edit this paper, in its current form, it will no longer resemble a paper written by you. I think you might want to try to take a deep breath and re-read it very slowly and see where you are missing the subjunctive "that" and where your sentence structure is not very solid. Take it sentence by sentence. You may wish to choose different phrases to make the paper appear less "oral" and more "written." This draft of the paper just seems very rough to me and you will need to do more of the work on your own before asking for help. Once you have it in a more complete format, I would be happy to help you. Good luck.